Independence is a gift which we got on August 14, 1947 after a struggle of our great leader Quaid-e-Azam Mohammad ali Jinnah. We are very luck that we are born in an independent country. The importance of independence can be seen in eyes of those who are still struggling for it. We should always thanks to ALLAH that we are independent state and can live our lives as per Islamic teaching. We pray for the independence of occupied Kashmir from the invasion of indian army.
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sentence structure is very good!